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Nora O’Dowd's avatar

What else can we do in times of chaos but listen to Steve Miller? Bravo, Ray, on this wonderful Greek chorus of poetry. Time to tackle The Iliad?

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Thanks nora!!! Ha. I hope not!

Petra's avatar

Mythic and wonderfully strange, with a touch of sad. <3

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Oh my, I thought you were talking about me “)

Petra's avatar

:)

School of Blue's avatar

This is great. A Telemachy tale with Steve thrown in. Awkward moment.

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thanks, Richard!

Earl Nobdy's avatar

Even Ithaca is a Teenage Wasteland

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

I really like how you bring Telemachus out of myth and into a restless, contemporary adolescence. The absent father remains a presence, almost projected onto that blank screen, while the boy searches for an escape he cannot yet name. And the ending works beautifully: the eagle is not simply freedom, but the moment he stops waiting and finally begins to move away on wings of his own.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks for those wonderful words, Antonio!

Sam Rasnake's avatar

“Bones to brain, legs faster

bullets fly, canned laughter

Staring at a television

not plugged in

Eleni twirls her curls

promises to set her ponies free” This a great section of a strong piece, Ray. Another fitting piece for the series. Love the approach of this poem and the series as a whole.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Thanks, Sam! I see you're doing one too!

Hope to see it someday!

Miner Poet's avatar

Tuned and taught like a perfect bow.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks, Ross!