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Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

What stayed with me is the moment when endurance finally gives way. The breakdown does not arrive at the edge of the roof, but much later, on the way home. That delay makes the poem feel painfully true.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Thanks, Antonio! It is.

MoTy's avatar

Incredibly written heartbreak, human slap in the last stanza. Latte included x

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks moty!

Nora O’Dowd's avatar

The pain of Covid, the pain of distance, the pain of betrayal. Woven as Penelope might, then breaking down. Brave one, Ray. Brave and excruciating.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Thanks a lot nora!!!

Earl Nobdy's avatar

Drive on, it don’t mean nothin

Barbara Bales's avatar

It's Wednesday, and the last thing I read before this was the news about a TikTok personality doing his livestream holding a knife and covered in blood. Made it hit a bit harder, I think. Thank you Ray!

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks Barbara! Good to see you here!

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks for the restacks l. and duke!