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The Weather Between Things's avatar

It’s when the pain stops you know you’re in trouble. Great work Ray ✌️

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks, weather!

Richbee's avatar

Lalala bamba. Peggy Sue rides the wings. Once more music stops. But the ears hear records continue to spin plane tales over and over. I’ve learned the words of woe.

Paul Wittenberger's avatar

The music and light plays in all of us, Ray. Sometimes there’s even an audience that sings along.

Petra's avatar

“My personal AI assistant” for the Grim Reaper? :D

The ending, though.

“Wake me to the music

and light playing

in all of us” <3

Sam Rasnake's avatar

“I felt the chill

of a church organ

playing on its own

candles lighting themselves

I knew Daddy wouldn’t

be coming home” Good writing, Ray. A moving piece.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks a lot, Sam!

MoTy's avatar

“church organ playing on its own” - childhood memory unlocked x

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks moty!

Nora O’Dowd's avatar

Death as an interruption rather than end. Love it, and the thought of that awakening. Nice one, Ray!!

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks Nora!!!

Brendan's avatar

Dem wounds become wombs when we're ready to surrender 'em.

Bosquet's avatar

Hola , Buen Poema. Un Saludo.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Gracias, Bosquet!

Earl Nobdy's avatar

Bye bye, Miss American Pie

Antonio Castellaneta's avatar

What strikes me is the moment when death stops being only a threat and becomes a presence to speak with. No longer just an ending, but something that makes the awakening to the music and light already within us feel more urgent.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

yes, thanks Antonio!

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Thanks Paul!

Ray Sweatman's avatar

Yes he is. Thanks Petra!