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Nick Hills's avatar

"The sun stops rising.

The people too. They sleep all day. Even the joggers."

I love it! Great poem, Ray!

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Thanks nick!

AsukaHotaru's avatar

The six white huskies with little bells have taken over my morning, and I’m not fighting them.

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Thanks Asuka!

Nora O’Dowd's avatar

Love the imagery, the Dylan disruption, and that happy red wheelbarrow! “Happiness” is a joy, Ray!!

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Thanks nora!!!

williamphaynes/elliott's avatar

reminded me of very early Dylan

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thanks, william!

Petra's avatar

The dogs run free and the whole ordered world collapses. The ending made me chuckle. That’s brilliant. <3

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:) thanks Petra!

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<3

Jasmine Marion's avatar

you had me at “the lady scatting guttural sounds in his back pocket.” king of scene, you are!

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thanks, jasmine!

MoTy's avatar

„wheelbarrow pushed

by six handsome men” - a theme continues. Smashing piece x

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Thanks moty!

Earl Nobdy's avatar

I have a similar woman who haunts my mind. Her icy hand holds a cruel grip on Narnia