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School of Blue's avatar

Fantastic piece. He didn't observe the willow curve , the barrier.

Ray Sweatman's avatar

thanks richard

Nora O’Dowd's avatar

Time has no dominion.

Another beauty, Ray!

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thanks nora !!

JJ's avatar

Beautiful. Thank you for this.

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thanks for the kind words, jj!

Cael Lawenu's avatar

Lovely rhymes, great imagery.

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thanks, Cael!

MoTy's avatar

Such a condensed, precise, eerie way to describe departure. One hand on the steering wheel, the other still holding her. A barrier missed - time, irrelevant. Beautiful Ray.

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Thanks for the kind words moty!

MoTy's avatar

You're very welcome. This piece is something special - it holds a technique I'd love to master myself, one day.

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thanks, moty! It's always fun to play with different forms/styles. Yours is cool!

M.P. Strayer's avatar

Really liked that last line

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Thanks m.p.!

Earl Nobdy's avatar

I can never remember where I parked

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Me either, Earl!

Gary L Taylor's avatar

I really enjoyed reading that. Great stuff, Ray.

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thanks, Gary!

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thanks for the likes, comments and restacks, nora, m.p, erin, stabilise, paul, eve, travis, b., sea, pancake, UW, moTy , richard, bran, enemies, brian k, earl, gary, dis, petra, imarkanx,, neko, roger, laura, monday, a Bella, skott, 60 blue. brian v., ani, daniil, himanshu, r-complex, firefly, michael m., james m!

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thanks bran!

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thanks, paul!